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This is all Katiebab’s fault. This is one book I could have happily ignored for the rest of my life. Sigh.

I’m trying to read Fifty Shades of Grey with an open mind, but damn, it’s hard, because A, I hate BDSM, B, I hate assholic controlling alpha males, and C, I hate stupid heroines.

Oh and just to piss me off even more, I see that the Kindle version of Fifty is more expensive than the paperback version. Grrrrr…

Anybody else going to be reading this with me? Go on, do it, do, it, do it!

Wish me luck…

(By the way, is it wrong that this is one book I don’t mind illegally passing to others? Just sayin’…)

An apparently self-pubbed author on Goodreads asked for people to give her feedback on a story she’d started writing. Well you know me, being the good Samaritan that I am, I went over and left this feedback on her blog.

Hi there

For me there were lots of telling and not enough showing. I find that I’m irritated at the heroine because of how casually she accepts her boyfriend cheating on her. This is such a bad message that as a romance reader, it puts me off wanting to continue with the story. I’m concerned with the age of the heroine in comparison the age of the hero. 21 is too young for this particular heroine I think. Also, I hate that the boyfriend has such a ghetto name, and coupled with him being a cheating skank, I feel that he’s fulfilling a really negative stereotype.

Just a couple more things, J’s internal dialogue is way too stilted, and her cyber conversation with Steve (sorry, but for me that’s a terribly generic name) just doesn’t inspire me to think he’s anything other than a pervert trying to get some ass. Had you made the heroine older, I might have felt differently.

In all honesty, I want an IR that doesn’t conform to every stereotype known to man, and the premise of this story wouldn’t inspire me to buy it, if it was in the shops.

Having said all of the above, I guess it depends on who your overall target audience is. If it’s for the average romance reader, then there’s no way this will do, however if it’s for those readers who expect guys called Deshawn to be cheating skanks, then go for it.

I thought that the above was pretty tame in comparison to my usual level of honesty, but I guess it depends whether or not she was truly looking for honest feedback, or just an ego-stroke. I’ll know what kind of author she is, if she doesn’t let my feedback through.

Oh by the way, so far, the feedback that she’s let through have been mostly positive. Why are people such enablers? The truth is, it really wasn’t great. Obviously it’s a bit late because apparently it’s already up for sale on Amazon. I just hope she ripped it up and started again, otherwise she won’t be selling many copies…

Oh and as a treat, chapter two is here.

Enjoy.

One of my commenters, Karla, pointed me in the direction of this epic ranty review of Sarah Mayberry’s Amorous Liaisons.

The blogger, Zosia, starts:

There should be a law forbidding people from writing books or making movies about ballet unless they are or were ballet dancers, because it’s always so badly screwed up. I should have liked this book – it featured ballet and Paris, two of my favourite things – but I very nearly went completely insane instead.

Apparently Zosia worked backstage at the Sidney Dance Company for some of their productions, hence her annoyance at the inaccuracies in the book.

Zosia writes: (more…)

A few weeks ago, Larissa Ione had a great and funny post about this subject here. Of course the first reaction upon reading it is to laugh. Put like that, it seems obvious, doesn’t it? Seriously, how often in real life people gasp in the middle of heartfelt conversations? I have a nagging suspicion that the answer would be either “almost no one I know” or “no one I know.”

Most people tend to use some words with greater frequency than others—mea culpa: after I hit post on my very first review I realized that I used the same adjective four times in three successive paragraphs. Picture me wincing—repeatedly. 😀 Brilliant prose it ain’t, obviously. But then, I am not a writer nor do I aspire to ever become one. Further, whatever I write doesn’t go through an editing process wherein three or more other people read through and point out things that need fixing.

(Yes, that’s my excuse and I’m sticking with it.)

Books are supposed to go through that editing process I mentioned before, wherein typos and grammatical errors and plot inconsistencies and all that good stuff are supposed to be weeded out before the book reaches the reader. So when I read a book—and most particularly a printed book—and find certain things, I get all cranky. For example… (more…)

One Thing About Pamela Clare's, Unlawful Contact...

Loved the book, loved the heroine, loved the hero, and most of all, loved, loved loved the plot.  Hero sentenced to life in prison for murder,  having already served six years?  I knew this would be a different sort of romance.

Anyway, I’m not going to post a full review, because quite frankly I can’t be arsed, but I have to say one thing.  This heroine (who’s a savvy, smart journalist) would not have gone into a drug store (she was hiding out with the hero, who was on the run at the time)  knowing that she would be spotted by surveillance cameras, and bought the morning after pill.  She just wouldn’t.

That’s all I have to say on the book itself, but isn’t it flipping annoying when authors make their heroines/heroes do things that don’t gel with the their character arcs?

Here’s the blurb from Pamela Clare’s website:

Taken hostage by a convicted murderer while reporting at a prison, Sophie Alton has no idea that the man holding the gun to her head is the bad boy who was her first love in high school. Condemned to life without parole, Marc Hunter finds himself with no choice but to break out of prison after his younger sister disappears with her baby.

Though he regrets what he has to put Sophie through, he can’t let anything get in the way of his stopping the corrupt officials who are set on destroying what’s left of his family. But being near Sophie rekindles memories for both of them. As the passion between them heats up, so does the conspiracy to put both of them in their graves.

You can buy Unlawful Contact from Amazon.com here, and from Amazon UK here.